Cherished and Desired (Retitled: Cherished Wine)

Revised:

I like the way you taste my name;
let it spread across your tongue,
roll it side to side and aspirate
its flavour in a slow puff
of breath that seduces
my ear to surrender
like a soldier
in a lost war.

I like the way you drink in my voice;
let it slide slowly down your throat
to caress and warm your neck
like a muffler and then let it
settle in your chest before
it stirs into the stomach
and entices you
to sigh.

First draft:

I like the way you taste my name;
let it spread across your tongue,
roll it side to side and aspirate
its flavour in a slow puff
of breath that seduces
my ear to surrender
like a soldier
in a lost war.

I like the way you drink in my voice;
let it slide slowly down your throat
to caress and warm your neck
like a muffler and then let it
settle in your chest before
it stirs into the stomach
and entices you
to sigh.

I like the way you make me feel
like a full-bodied wine,
cherished and desired.